Second Draft of USA Today Ad

[Bryan]

This is the second draft of the ad being commissioned by llepard. Obviously the final result will be just one pic. Post your thoughts.

Detailed view - top half:

Lower half:

Full view:

 

[Joey Wahoo]

Outstanding.

I'd change "legions of illegal immigrants" to "millions of illegal immigrants"

 

[RPFTW!]

I think its great!

 

[happyphilter]

ahhh! im so excited! it looks GREAT!

 

[spacebetween]

The very last checkmark point in the bottom lefthand corner of the ad doesn't have its own line.

 

[SgtBulldog]

Looks great! Changes really made a difference.

 

[dsentell]

Fabulous!

 

[nathanielyao]

Cool!

 

[iskimtsnow]

Awesome!!!!!!!!
I think that is a perfect distillation of all the ideas brought up yesterday!!!!!

 

[BlutStein]

This is simply amazing. Bravo!

 

[ItDoesNotStopWithRonPaul]

Sweet ad. Most of the reasonable criticisms from the first ad seem fixed. I like that there is a lot of detail. Anyone willing to donate their money is going to be willing to read for 5 min and then research online.

 

[Joey Wahoo]

I love the ad. But here's another suggestion:

I'd replace "Is opposed to a preemptive attack. advocates a humble, noninterventionist foreign policy", with simply

"Favors a nononterventionist foreign policy and will keep us out of expensive, no-win wars."

 

[NinjaPirate]

cooooool.

 

[drain]

looks great.

-adrian

 

[BrianH]

So glad you changed "abolish the IRS" to "phase out the IRS". This sounds more a careful and considered approach and not quite so alarming as many might at first find it.

 

[LibertyEagle]

It's beautiful!

I myself miss that line though about "eternal vigilance".

...warned that the price of liberty is eternal vigilance. While you (maybe "we" would be better) were distracted, the government stole your liberty and bankrupted your nation. Ron Paul would restore the vision of the Founders of this great nation.

Oh, and on that comment about donations and active military personnel. Hasn't he also received the most money from veterans?

 

[kylejack]

The statement that Ron Paul never accepts money from special interest groups or lobbyists is false. He never lets it sway his vote, but he DOES accept money from any special interest group that wants to give it. Other than that, its looking good.

 

[torchbearer]

In "We The People" above rons picture... the word "The" looks lifted out of place. Could you raise that entire line so that it would be level?

 

[Mark Rushmore]

Maybe "begin a free and prosperous nation" rather than "set up a free and.."? It has a much smoother flow and historical feel.

 

[10thAmendmentMan]

That is a very strong ad. The only critique I have is that it might not be the best idea to give the "RonPaulForums.com" address on there as... umm.... we might scare some people off if they haven't already made up their minds.