Third Draft of USA Today Ad -- Close to final!!

[TechnoGuyRob]

It should be :

"The lives of our brave soldiers"

Not

"The lives or our brave soldiers"

 

[max]

Glad to see that the "Mainstream Media" conspiracy theory stuff has been excised. That stuff just makes us look paranoid and crazy. It's the Mainstream Media that we are using for this ad. The U.S. has a very free press that is largely unregulated - the market is largely the regulator. There is no mainstream media conspiracy against Ron Paul. There are simply certain individuals in the media (both mainstream and non-mainstream) that are dishonest about Paul (for example John Gibson of Fox who still claims Paul is a 9/11 truther).

no conspiracy against RP?...

Dont let this media honeymoon fool you. The media lovesfest is only because RP is seen as a novelty act...

When he really makes his move....the media moguls will push every button in their arsenal in order to destry him...

just wait and see what they do to RP and come back to me in 3 months to say there is no such thing as a media conspiracy

 

[SwanMaiden]

A++

 

[MsDoodahs]

I think it's awful. The first draft was fantastic. However, this is even more watered down than the second draft! For example, the term "debt slave" has been removed.

 

[francisco]

I think you should take off the words "Please Donate!" in the second checkmark, bottom right.
Sounds kind of out-of-place and desperate. Plus you are already basically saying to donate with the TeaParty advertisement.

I disagree.

A Salesman must ask for the sale. Well-known principle.

 

[lastnymleft]

(1) How about putting the word "far" in, to emphasise the parlous state?:

"...but we have strayed far from their wise counsel."

(2) Dark Teaparty block is not quite center-justified between the left and right blocks, leading to less white to text on right.

(3) Are you absolutely SURE the phone number is correct?

 

[RonPaulFever]

This has been mentioned previously, but the statement about RP never accepting money from lobbyists or special interest groups is not accurate and should be removed!

 

[Energy]

If you can, rearrange Fathers and make Ron equal size similar to this (from 2nd draft thread):

 

[Drknows]

Nice! One thing though when i Google RonPaulStopDreaming.com the youtube video comes up. I guess there is no landing page? This might confuse some basic internet users. You have to remember most people use the search function.

No biggie

 

[MsDoodahs]

This has been mentioned previously, but the statement about RP never accepting money from lobbyists or special interest groups is not accurate and should be removed!

Correct, you are publishing an untruth if you say he doesn't accept money from lobbyists/special interest groups. He will take their money but it does not change his beliefs or his votes.

And I do like the changed photos of FF so they're all staring at me with rather disapproving looks on their faces better.

 

[brumans]

I disagree.

A Salesman must ask for the sale. Well-known principle.

Sure, but as I said, putting it right there between facts and what not about him seems out of place and awkward.

 

[fcofer]

I think it is excellent! I like it much better than the original. Although it sucks to have to sacrifice content, I think that the extra whitespace makes it much, much more attractive and likely to be read.

My only suggestion is what an earlier poster mentioned: Perhaps you should leave out all of the other websites and have just the official campaign and teaparty. It's a little overwhelming to have all of those sites there.

Also, this might be just because of the quality of the image, but some of the kerning in the type looks like it could be improved. Surely there is someone here who's a typesetting expert or something who might have an opinion -- maybe I'm just making stuff up.

 

[Ron Paul in 2008]

I disagree.

A Salesman must ask for the sale. Well-known principle.

I made the same suggestion in the other thread. I would definitely take it away. A great product sells itself and we dont need a salesman to push it on people. We should give the feeling that the reader is discovering Ron Paul rather than being asked to support him. Its obvious that we want them to donate by promoting teaparty and ronpaul2008.com.

Three people have said this.

My only suggestion is what an earlier poster mentioned: Perhaps you should leave out all of the other websites and have just the official campaign and teaparty. It's a little overwhelming to have all of those sites there.

Agreed. You are the fourth person in this thread who has said that.

 

[Devon]

Healthcare

Something like this for healthcare:

Paul will push to reduce government management and overregulation of the healthcare industry, so that prices will come down and quality will go up as happens when competition is allowed to flourish in a free market.

 

[James R]

New & Improved:

Eyes all facing forward!

Lower section less cluttered!

 

[Man from La Mancha]

Outstanding!!!!




..copy,paste,linked to teaparty07.com

 

[American]

I like it allot,

I would like to add, "the media wants to marginalize him, as "unelectable" yet he has been right about everything leading up the the war in Iraq, the economy, and still he wont play the dirty political bashing games with these pundits, why? He doesnt want there votes, Ron Paul is asking for YOUR vote.".

blah blah blah, I like the ad!

 

[krott5333]

New & Improved:

Eyes all facing forward!

hmmm.. I do like the rearranging of the founders! very nice.

 

[Paulitician]

So I'm guessing Ron Paul's picture will stay tiny?

 

[James R]

Suggestion for improvement:

Nearly every single line in the black Tea Party box has a different font size. Have the top and bottom lines with extra large font. However, all the middle lines should be the same font size to improve the flow of reading.