I may be confused. Is this the script we're dealing with at present?
Is there such a thing as liberty?
does liberty mean you can take whatever you want from other people?
does it mean you can do whatever you want in their homes?
liberty is about having respect for other people's liberty...
and not to trample, diminish or undermine their liberties.
(long pause)
does liberty mean the united states can do whatever it wants to promote it's interests wherever it wants?
does it mean that we always know what's best for other nations?
does it mean that we can kill civilians of other nations?
(long pause)
if there is such a thing as liberty...
we are far from it...
this is what we believe in, this is what ron paul believes.
(play clip of ron paul talking about foreign policy)
If so, I guess I'd suggest tweaking the theme. Here the theme is liberty. But is liberty the hot button for the folks we want to reach? In my mind, for mainstream GOPers, liberty ain't it. I'm not saying it's not a beautiful, rousing word, but it's not the F.P. bit that makes primary voters go "huh." Everyone is for liberty. It's like cookies and grandmas and peace and choice. Everyone is for it; it doesn't mean anything. Liberty, I scream, and the crowd goes wild. Cookies, I scream, and the crowd goes wild. A F.P. video right now, for supervoters in Iowa and N.H. has got to speak to those voters. Everyone wants liberty. Right? Liberty isn't the word upon which the vote swings. It sounds good and signifies nothing of import here -- for these voters, for this mindset we need to engage.
What's the word? The phrase? Not this, I'm thinking.
And then the tone. Look at where and how "you" and "we" are placed. There's an us-vs.-them set up. Yes, it's subtle. But, also kinda allpowerful. I think there's this little guy in most supervoter's minds, who wants to see what would happen if we just chopped down the box we've been working inside F.P. wise. We don't want to provoke an us-vs.-them or let-us-convince-you notion. Rather a you-already-know-it notion. Assume. You know? Assume that folks just need justification for their little guy inside to stand up and say, "I was right all along." Play to that. We love to think we were right all along. Make us love ourselves for being right -- even if it was just a little guy agitating in our brains.
Speak to the audience.