Fifth Draft of USA Today Ad -- Really about final!!

[jake]

needs a much bigger picture of RON PAUL..

 

[Menthol Patch]

What is so terrible about it?

Are you a troll?

Linda and I have been working our guts out on this thing for four days.

Your comment is not helpful to our psyches.

Perhaps you are right, but it is too late now.

LWL

llepard,

The first version of the ad was absolutely fantastic. It made me jump out of my seat with excitement. However, each additional version has become worse and worse. The message has been watered down tremendously and important parts of the message have even been removed.

It's your money and you can have whatever you want in this ad. But I urge you to please use the first ad. It was what YOU really wanted. Please don't listen to those who have put pressure on you since then. I urge you to run the FIRST VERSION of the ad.

Thank you for supporting Ron Paul.

 

[Paulitician]

I still don't understand why the pic of Ron Paul has to be so tiny.

 

[llepard]

Please fix the inaccurate special interest line.

It has been fixed.

LWL

 

[jake]

llepard,

The first version of the ad was absolutely fantastic. It made me jump out of my seat with excitement. However, each additional version has become worse and worse. The message has been watered down tremendously and important parts of the message have even been removed.

It's your money and you can have whatever you want in this ad. But I urge you to please use the first ad. It was what YOU really wanted. Please don't listen to those who have put pressure on you since then. I urge you to run the FIRST VERSION of the ad.

Thank you for supporting Ron Paul.

I tend to agree - YOU are running the ad, you choose what you want in it - if it looks good to you, go with it. it is definitely true that each revision has become more watered down.. I think you need to go with creating a splash here with STRONG statements (factual, of course) not a watered generic political advertisement. - just my 2 cents.

 

[llepard]

llepard,

The first version of the ad was absolutely fantastic. It made me jump out of my seat with excitement. However, each additional version has become worse and worse. The message has been watered down tremendously and important parts of the message have even been removed.

It's your money and you can have whatever you want in this ad. But I urge you to please use the first ad. It was what YOU really wanted. Please don't listen to those who have put pressure on you since then. I urge you to run the FIRST VERSION of the ad.

Thank you for supporting Ron Paul.

I hear you Menthol. I loved it too. Kind of sad to see it go.

That advertisement made us feel good, remember our goal here is to make lots of voters feel good. That way our man wins.

But I know, it was the NH adv. that grabbed me. That adv. was riveting!

It is the reason I did this advertisemtn

 

[LFOD]

What is so terrible about it?

Are you a troll?

Linda and I have been working our guts out on this thing for four days.

Your comment is not helpful to our psyches.

Perhaps you are right, but it is too late now.

LWL

This is a great ad. If an ad is going to take up my time, it had better convey real information. This does. Breezy designs are a dime a dozen.

My only suggestions (my apologies if additional input is not wanted at this point)

- I agree with having founders all face center. It gives a "unified" and organized feel to the first thing the eye sees.

- I read an earlier draft which said "warned of the dangers of foreign entanglements. Now thousands of your men and women suffer and die protecting and building foreign nations while your government plans a military draft. Ron Paul would stop the war and bring out troops home."

That was clearer and more powerful than the current version of that point, which seems wordy and somewhat abstract to me.

You have my sincere thanks and admiration for this effort.

 

[acmegeek]

Please consider making some changes to the overall graphic design...

I have the utmost respect for Linda and Larry with their truly patriotic and selfless efforts. I think that this ad will get a lot of press just because of the story behind it.

More people will know that they don't have to vote for the "cleanest dirty shirt", that there a candidate who truly cares about our country and has the verifiable integrity to get our country back on track.

So, that being said, I liked the layout and design of the ad, but thought I could improve it a little.

My design was not about the text verbage or formatting, but about the design in general with the text pasted in.

So, here is my design: (again, ignore the text it is from an older version)

http://www.s3os.com/misc/ron_paul_ad.jpg

It is entirely done in vector format (except for the pasted text and photos) so it is infinitely scalable for any purpose. And it is also very easy to modify.

Regards,

 

[Paulitician]

acmegeek, you are brilliant! I love that faint background. I was actually advocating something like that.

 

[Jmaths117]

This is the fifth draft of the ad being commissioned by llepard. Try to keep comments to issues of high importance.

A pdf will be made available soon!


Detailed view - top half:

Lower half:

Full view:

Why is Ron Paul's picture so small? It must be large.

 

[Menthol Patch]

I would say the ad is NOT to make voters feel good. It is to introduce them to TRUTH.

 

[ProBlue33]

Acmegeek

Nice Job, so many awesome idea's, to bad we cant use them all.

 

[cero]

A couple of more ...warned would do it for me.
The first and second drafts were great now it feels like is lacking something.
I say go with what you like and thanks for the good work your doing.

 

[Drknows]

HEY llepard RUN IT!

See he likes the ad guys, You know what i notice? Its the younger generation complaining and saying the ad sucks. How many of us read USA TODAY? Or even pick up a paper and read it for 30 mins or more? My generation has Attention Deficit Disorder.

We get all our news online or TV. What works for us doesn't work for the 50 plus crowd.

I'm willing to bet they will read all the way through and enjoy every minute of it. I bet they cut it out and save it.

 

[Ron Paul in 2008]

I really liked having the founding fathers eyes face the reader and the reformation of the bottom. So many people loved it and it wasn't added? I also will say again that only ronpaul2008.com and teaparty should be listed.

I hear you Menthol. I loved it too. Kind of sad to see it go.

I think we made the right decision removing the draft reference. The only thing that I think was watered down was the control of both political parties. I am not opposed to it being in the final. That is a good message to send to 2 million people and they are not going to hear it elsewhere. I liked it. Anyone who may be turned off by that message probably wouldn't vote for him anyways and it has the potential to grab some people who feel that way but are too busy to follow politics.

suggestion

If it is changed to "We the founding fathers" up top maybe it should just be changed to "We." As an open letter the founders wouldn't say founding fathers. I also read some suggestions on other forums that Ron Paul's name should be somewhere up top.

 

[Ron Paul Fan]

Are we still talking about this thing? I said in the other thread 5 hours ago to just run the damn thing already. You're never gonna please everybody. We're running out of time. RUN IT!!!!!!!

 

[bolidew]

Are we still talking about this thing? I said in the other thread 5 hours ago to just run the damn thing already. You're never gonna please everybody. We're running out of time. RUN IT!!!!!!!

even with typos?

 

[Ron Paul Fan]

even with typos?

Why are there still typos in the 5th draft? Those should have been fixed in the 2nd draft! We don't need any more drafts! People just talk and talk and talk and nothing gets achieved. We talk ourselves into a stalemate. Print it, run it, copy it, distribute it. Easy peasy Japaneasy.

 

[Godbag]

Like a few others have said, its never going to please everybody, and that isnt the point!! FOUNDING FATHERS ALL FACING INWARDS, RON'S PICTURE AS LARGE AS THEIRS, ALL OF THE REVISED SENTENCES, AND THANKYOU LLEPARD FOR FIRSTLY PUTTING UP THE MONEY FOR THIS AD, AND HAVING THE PATIENCE TO LISTEN TO EVERYBODIES GRIPES!!

 

[deedles]

Does anyone remember we went through this exact same thing doing the mosaic ad for Iowa? lol... I'm having flashbacks.

And look how wonderfully that turned out.. it was truly a group effort with Xar's hair being pulled out that time as the real world worker.

I vote facing center .