Ad I'm submitting to school newspaper, need feedback asap

[foofighter20x]

Well, if you've seen it in print, then I'll take your word for it.

 

[beobeli]

As president... will:

• End the war and bring our troops home immediately
• Fix our unconstitutional and senseless foreign policy that creates enemies while running us broke
• Downsize expensive and unnecessary layers of government bureaucracy.
• Balance the budget and strengthen the economy through sound foreign policy, smaller government, sound monetary policy, and stable dollar
• Phase out of the income tax, enable younger Americans to opt out of Social Security and other insolvent government entitlements while taking care of those who are dependent on it
• Bring the Constitution and rule of law back to the White House.
• Restore personal liberties and habeas corpus

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---- Principled Integrity and Knowledge --- (instead of "consistency")

Strictly guided by the U.S. Constitution a 10-term congressman Ron Paul has honorably represented the American people by never voting to...

... reduce personal liberties...

... or send our troops into nation building or world policing missions .

(Close with)

DISCOVER AND IMAGINE
http://www.youtube.com/RonPaul2008dotcom
http://www.RonPaul2008.com
1-877-RonPaul

 

[Electric Church]

Might wanna stick something in there saying "No policing of the world"

 

[krott5333]

its excellent. I like the first one.

I looked at it quickly. .the same way a viewer would. I read the quote. I read the bullet points. I liked what I hear. I will look further into this candidate.

 

[Matt Collins]

Make sure that this is as close to the editorial pages as possible, inside the business section, and inside the local section.