Vote For the RP Ad to be Aired in IA & NH

Elwar said:
A city street, a bunch of people standing around a lady who is lying on the street. The guys standing around her are bewildered saying things such as
"I'm a lawyer, I can't help her." ... etc.

Then you see a fellow stepping through the crowd with a doctor's bag on his side.
Camera pans to the lady on the ground and you see that it's Lady Liberty, pale and in bad shape.
The doctor pulls out a rolled up copy of the Constitution with We The People showing on the front as he bends down to help her.
Next shot is either of the healthy Lady Liberty or a dramatic capture of the actual statue of liberty with some voice over saying things like Dr. Ron Paul supports the Constitution etc...etc...as much as can go in that short of a timeframe.

End with a shot of "Our government's sick, Our country needs a Doctor...NOT a lawyer"
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Yeah, this is really good. Maybe the last sentence could be re-worded a bit, but other than that it's awesome.
 
For those of you who are worried about offending people, to let you know, I sent my man in LA the leading script and he pointed out tons of stuff that NOBODY here caught. Some BIG things that slipped by all of us.

So, have confidence that my people know what they're doing. Thanks! :)
 
DjLoTi said:
For those of you who are worried about offending people, to let you know, I sent my man in LA the leading script and he pointed out tons of stuff that NOBODY here caught. Some BIG things that slipped by all of us.

So, have confidence that my people know what they're doing. Thanks! :)
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I didn't know you wanted us to critique them, I saw something in all of them that needed changing, but didn't want to hurt anyone's feelings in the group. You and all your people need to work with the F.E.C. to save you some headaches later. Those people don't play !!!

I went back and looked @ #19 and don't think it will help the campaign as much as #20. We are trying to get votes not scare people away. When you talk about getting the gov't out of healthcare, you and I know and like what that means, most elderly (who vote in the largest percentages) would be frighten by such talk. They would think he wants to stop their medicare and that would KILL the campaign. You have to explain such "drastic" change to people. You don't throw it at them in a 30 seceond spot. Most people don't know the evil of the UN, so don't know how that part of the ad would broaden our voter base. You need to think like John Q Public, not from your patriotic, constitutionalist, libertarian or from wherever you are coming. We want to win an election not push our pet projects. That will come ONLY if we win. You have to be extremely careful not to have the elderly vote to turn on you. If you lose their vote you lose. If you get their votes you are on your way to victory.
 
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Timing

The BIGGEST problem with almost ALL the ads is timing. Only a few of them could actually fit into 30 seconds. #3 would take almost a minute and a half!
 
i dont think we should be shooting down things because of the way they are worded - that can be addressed after 1) it is chosen as the one we are definitely going with, and 2) they can be easily altered without changing the basic premise of the ad.

the point is whether or not the ad does a good job of attracting people to ron paul and his basic stances, and which format does a better job of accomplishing that. wording can be revised later.
 
DjLoTi said:
For those of you who are worried about offending people, to let you know, I sent my man in LA the leading script and he pointed out tons of stuff that NOBODY here caught. Some BIG things that slipped by all of us.

So, have confidence that my people know what they're doing. Thanks! :)
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such as?
 
DjLoTi said:
For those of you who are worried about offending people, to let you know, I sent my man in LA the leading script and he pointed out tons of stuff that NOBODY here caught. Some BIG things that slipped by all of us.

So, have confidence that my people know what they're doing. Thanks! :)
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I like #19. Perhaps, change the soldier line to .."would never send me out to nation build again."

Try to make each character as traditional as possible.
 
Voting will close in 8 hours

Over 100 different people have casted their vote.

Voting will close in 8 hours since we seem to have a clear and definite winner (the current winning script has over twice the amount of votes than the second place script). However, since it's already too late to get the winning script to the producers today for editing and production, we will send it in late tonight and they can start working on it early tomorrow morning and into the end of this week and next. In the meanwhile, whoever hasn't voted has an opportunity to cast their vote. And we can start discussing how to get this current first-place ad into 30 seconds and edited properly for a state-wide audience to portray Ron Paul in the best light possible. We might have to cut out some of the characters in this script...
 
#13

Guys, I think alot are good to one degree or another. #19 is ok but I think it's a bit too complicated for some people's thought patterns. It seems to me that the most clear, concise and straightforward is #13 (and I do anything to avoid that number). It's honestly the only one that would capture my attention. Many of the others would seem too status quo for political ads and if I wasn't already a Ron Paul supporter I wouldn't even pay attention. JMHO FWIW:D
 
Vote Closed

Vote Closed.

We have a winner!!!

Script 19 is the winner, with 34 of 111 votes, or 31% of the vote. Script 7 (which I voted for :p ) came in a distant second with 15 of 111 votes, or 14%. The other 60-some-odd votes were for the other scripts, which were also very good!!!

See the full results here:
http://www.snappoll.com/view_results.php?poll_id=213626

Now that we have a winner, let's move forward and talk about how to edit this thing into a 30-second TV spot...

[scenes while driving from the road, passing RP signs, or going under an overpass with a RP banner hanging]

Text and narrator : "So, just who is Ron Paul?"

Rugged Farmer standing in corn field: "RP wants to get us out of NAFTA, CAFTA, and end unfair corporate subsidies"

Mother with children in her home: "RP wants to get the government out of our healthcare and educational systems - so I am free to choose how my children grow and learn"

Soldier in fatigues: "RP voted NO to the Iraq War in 2002, and will never ask me to fight and die to enforce UN Resolutions"

Hispanic man (fluent english speaking, in business suit?): "RP believes in the rule of law, and will not allow those who cheat the system to profit from it at my expense"

College kid in dorm room (a white male with a pot leaf shirt?? hehe): "RP is the only politician who believes I have a right to live my life how i choose, as an individual"

[Flash to each subject in order]
Farmer - "I am an American Farmer"
Mother - "I am an American Mother"
Soldier - "I am an American Soldier"
Hispanic - "I am an American Citizen"
College Kid - "I am America's Future"

[Show RP meetup group holding signs]
Group - "We're Taking a Stand for Our Rights - Vote Ron Paul for President in 2008!"
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P.S. I will leave the vote page up, and you can still vote for fun if you want!!! And read the thoughtful, creative, and ingenius scripts you guys submitted. Thanks for all your submissions.
 
then what ?

Hey Ma ! What Pa ! That lady on that ad said that Ron Paul fellow wants to get the gov't out of healthcare. You know what that means, he would cut our medicare out and cut the medicade to Suzy and the great grandbaby ! We got to vote against that SOB and get all the kids and grandkids to vote against him and start working against him. We'd both die without our medication. He's plum dangerous to this country and MUST BE STOPPED !!!:mad:

Ron Paul said he wasn't going to put anyone out on the street, not just cut people off that have become dependent on this system. You need to think long and hard before you finalize that script , you can do more damage to the campaign than the good RP has done in six months of campaigning !

If it's not in his official platform that can be found under issues on his website, it shouldn't be used period. You go to all this trouble and HQ requests that you not run the ad as worded, then what ? I'd make sure everything matches up with his platform and there won't be any problems with HQ.

I think it is an outstanding idea and still hope it can be used all over America on local cable & network affiliates. Most people just don't think anything is really important unless they see it on TV ! If the people start seeing RP ads all over the US his poll numbers will surely rise...:)
 
Bro.Butch said:
Hey Ma ! What Pa ! That lady on that ad said that Ron Paul fellow wants to get the gov't out of healthcare. You know what that means, he would cut our medicare out and cut the medicade to Suzy and the great grandbaby ! We got to vote against that SOB and get all the kids and grandkids to vote against him and start working against him. We'd both die without our medication. He's plum dangerous to this country and MUST BE STOPPED !!!:mad:

Ron Paul said he wasn't going to put anyone out on the street, not just cut people off that have become dependent on this system. You need to think long and hard before you finalize that script , you can do more damage to the campaign than the good RP has done in six months of campaigning !

If it's not in his official platform that can be found under issues on his website, it shouldn't be used period. You go to all this trouble and HQ requests that you not run the ad as worded, then what ? I'd make sure everything matches up with his platform and there won't be any problems with HQ.

I think it is an outstanding idea and still hope it can be used all over America on local cable & network affiliates. Most people just don't think anything is really important unless they see it on TV ! If the people start seeing RP ads all over the US his poll numbers will surely rise...:)
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Excellent point. We have to cut *something* out to make this ad 30 seconds. Let's start with the healthcare line. Any other comments?
 
Well, how about this revision:

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Rugged Farmer standing in corn field: "RP wants to do away with so-called Free-Trade agreements like NAFTA, and end unfair corporate subsidies"

Mother with children in her home: "RP wants to privatize our healthcare and educational systems - so I am free to choose what is best for my family"

Soldier in fatigues: "RP voted NO to the Iraq War in 2002, and will never ask me to fight and die to enforce UN Resolutions"

Hispanic man (fluent english speaking, in business suit?): "RP believes in the rule of law, and will not allow those who cheat the system to profit from it"

College kid in dorm room (black male, gay male, or liberal female?): "RP believes I have a right to live my life how i choose, as an individual"

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If we absolutely had to cut one of the scenes - i'd take out the college kid before any of the others. We could cut the healthcare part out entirely, but i thought it went well with a concerned mother.. and healthcare is a bigger issue than education at the moment it seems...
 
Santana28 said:
Well, how about this revision:

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Rugged Farmer standing in corn field: "RP wants to do away with so-called Free-Trade agreements like NAFTA, and end unfair corporate subsidies"

Mother with children in her home: "RP wants to privatize our healthcare and educational systems - so I am free to choose what is best for my family"

Soldier in fatigues: "RP voted NO to the Iraq War in 2002, and will never ask me to fight and die to enforce UN Resolutions"

Hispanic man (fluent english speaking, in business suit?): "RP believes in the rule of law, and will not allow those who cheat the system to profit from it"

College kid in dorm room (black male, gay male, or liberal female?): "RP believes I have a right to live my life how i choose, as an individual"

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If we absolutely had to cut one of the scenes - i'd take out the college kid before any of the others. We could cut the healthcare part out entirely, but i thought it went well with a concerned mother.. and healthcare is a bigger issue than education at the moment it seems...
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I don't think "privatize" would go over well either... I'm not even sure this script can fit in 30 secs, we might have to take a line out anyway
 
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