Help wanted: translating a Dutch song into English

[Fred the musician]

Some time ago I wrote a song in Dutch about the bankers and their way of robbing us.
Now I want to do this song in English, but I need help.

On this website you can hear the song in Dutch (so that you get to know the music - very useful if you want the lyrics to fit) and you can see the Dutch lyrics, their simple translation (not fitting the music and no rhyme) and the English lyrics as far as they are there already.

If you can help me (even if you can add only one line) I'd appreciate it very much.

Link: http://sp.goedgehost.be/geld

 

[oyarde]

You seem to speak good English Fred , is it word placement you need help with and not the words ? If so , just put it up.

 

[Fred the musician]

My knowledge of English is above the average Belgian, that's true. But the words must fit the music AND rhyme. That's not easy.

 

[helmuth_hubener]

bump

 

[Occam's Banana]

You seem to speak good English Fred , is it word placement you need help with and not the words ? If so , just put it up.

My knowledge of English is above the average Belgian, that's true. But the words must fit the music AND rhyme. That's not easy.

You should post a translation of the lyrics into English without worrying about whether they rhyme or "fit the music" - sort of like a "first draft" for the English version. That way, English speakers would have something to base recommendations or suggestions on without having to know any Dutch.

 

[RDM]

You should post a translation of the lyrics into English without worrying about whether they rhyme or "fit the music" - sort of like a "first draft" for the English version. That way, English speakers would have something to base recommendations or suggestions on without having to know any Dutch.

Here's Google's translation:

Have you ever heard some heads of state often thought
What they said and what they expected
What were they to do exactly

They were fighting for freedom and peace
Just like millions of years ago
But now it's only for dough
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But you pay the bank determines their damage
Politics joins you betrayed
The one claw which is still another washes

Banking system that knows how to sew us back
Which way the wind will be blowing
That voc-spirit shall never change

You know which way the wind is blowing
Inflation is it where it's all about
They incite war and violence

So let's fight for freedom and peace
Just like millions of years ago
But now it's only about money
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They take away or express some at
In their interests, not yours or mine
They count themselves rich ... with you bankrupt

They first get your house and then money
You lose until after the comma exhausted
After failure to repay they do not

Steal the banks of the common people
They do not see it but there grows a thundercloud
It threatens a revolution of violence

We must fight for freedom and peace
Just like millions of years ago
But now it's only about money
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The cell that awaits if you rob a bank
However, a bonus promised him
You're the perpetrator, he's the hero
Oh what fun is all that money
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The inflation is what matters
Tolerated by our state
The bank will work with us to get wages

So we have to fight for freedom and peace
Just like millions of years ago
But the enemy is now only Capital

The nation is now in revolt - that's normal
After all, why pick the bank us completely bald

The battle is really not about the freedom and peace
So not like millions of years ago
A strong currency is still normal
Now say it so hard all:
A strong currency is still normal
Now say it so hard all:
A strong currency is still normal
Now say it so hard all:

 

[Fred the musician]

That's exactly what I did, Occam. On the webpage you can click to choose between the Dutch lyrics and the (proper!) English translation (not what Google Translate makes of it).

 

[Fred the musician]

Here's Google's translation:

Have you ever heard some heads of state often thought
What they said and what they expected

etc

This is a terrible "translation"; it is nothing like the real lyrics.

 

[Fred the musician]

If you click there you'll get the English translation.

 

[libertyjam]

If you click there you'll get the English translation.

One suggestion, I would change the line:

But the rich leave all the loss for you and me

To:

But the rich leave all the pain for you and me
or just
The rich leave all the pain for you and me

 

[Fred the musician]

One suggestion, I would change the line:

But the rich leave all the loss for you and me

To:

But the rich leave all the pain for you and me
or just
The rich leave all the pain for you and me

I'll take it into consideration. Thanks.